Thoughts on 28

Spoilers here for chapter 28.

Just some thoughts on the chapter now that it's up, and I've received a few reviews.

I had been considering bring Kodachi into the story eventually, although not necessarily as another molester, and this was definitely sooner than my original intent. However, it did give me the opportunity to set up a few things, in a way which might have worked better than the approach I first planned. A couple that I can reveal right now - first, I could let Ryoga's Jekyll side out for a while and even allow him to be tortured in a minor way, to remind everyone that he still exists inside the guy. Second, this provided a means to keep Ryoga away overnight, which is the night of the New Year, a very important night in Japanese culture and one where Gosunkugi had extracted a promise from Akane regarding what she'll be doing at midnight.

Neither of those things required Kodachi, but I wanted Ryoga with someone, and it was too soon for him to play with Ukyo again. Putting Kodachi in the scene also allowed me to set up something that I haven't fully made up my mind about, but if I go with it, it should slowly emerge over several upcoming chapters.

As for the question from "Anon" as to whether I will bring Shampoo into Haido's clutches, the answer is no. The Joketsuzoku are in China, will stay in China, and will not be appearing in the story. They - particularly Cologne - would be too upsetting to the balance of power, both as it exists right now, and where I want it to end up. I don't object in principle to their presence in Ranma porn, and may even use them in some future story, if I ever manage to finish writing this one.

Next chapter should have the night of the New Year (back at the Tendos), the morning after for Ryoga and Kodachi, Ryoga's return to the Tendo home, and more of the dragon's whisker saga.

MV 28 Posted

Okay, chapter 28 is finally posted. I never did remember what other thing I wanted to do in the final scene. It didn't have to do with the stuff she put on Ryoga's dick - I originally planned to put some on her as well, but made a conscious decision against it later. Now that I've posted the chapter, I'll probably remember what it is within the hour. For now, I've got other things to get to. Like that new book I want to read.

Forgetting Something

Well, I've finished the rewriting. I need to make a final pass with the spellcheck, and take care of formatting issues for the sites where I'll be posting it. That's three different formats, one for AFFnet, one for my web site on asstr, and the last a purely text version for asstr. I've automated the process somewhat, so it isn't too onerous.

What's bugging me at the moment is I'm certain I've forgotten something I wanted to include in the last scene. I'm sure that as I was approaching that point earlier today, I had an idea for something important I wanted to add. But now I can't remember what it was. Very frustrating. I'm going to let my subconscious knock it around for a bit, and see if it can find the missing piece. I'm not planning to post tonight anyway - it's getting late, and I want to take care of a few things before bed rather than dicker with the formatting crap right now.

I probably won't have time to do anything with the story for the next few weeks after this chapter. Like I said in a previous post, we have a major push at work for the end of April, and I'll be busy working on my taxes for the next couple of weekends. But I'll definitely get chapter 28 up tomorrow, one way or another.

Polishing Chapter 28

I'm a large portion of the way through cleaning up chapter 28. As I feared, I didn't get started on it until this morning. Then my wife dragged me out shopping, to a movie, and to a restaurant after. But I'm back to work on it now, and am hopeful of finishing up tonight. Just thought I'd take a quick break for this update.

If all goes well (crossing my fingers) I'll post the chapter tomorrow. I.e., Sunday.

I'm even holding off on reading a new book I bought while I try to get this finished up.

MV 28 Draft Complete

It took far too long, but I've finally completed the first draft of chapter 28 of Moxibustion Violation. Mind, it's not ready to be posted yet. I still need to go through and clean it all up, but that's generally not as hard as writing it in the first place. I was beginning to wonder if I'd ever get this chapter finished, so I'm pleased to know that the answer is yes, I have finished it.

I'm not going to make any guarantees about when I'll get it posted. Soon, I hope, naturally. But work has been pretty hectic recently - we have a major target around the end of April, and the closer we get the more upper management is pressing us.

Hard to believe it's finally Spring, eh? (For those of you in the northern hemisphere.)

Ugh. I just had the unpleasant thought - sometime in the next couple of weekends I'm going to have to see about getting my taxes done. Oh joy.

Crouch of the Wild Tiger

Imagine me doing the Crouch of the Wild Tiger, apologizing to everyone for not finishing the chapter this weekend. I meant to. But I got caught up in following all the news of the disaster in Japan, and time slipped away from me. I did get some more written, but didn't finish the chapter. Sorry, sorry, sorry.

I really am hoping to complete chapter 28 as soon as possible.

Why, oh why, won't someone do a decent Akane for Super Deepthroat? Although the recent Disney characters have been pretty good.

Daylight Savings Time is, in my opinion, one of the stupider ideas society has had.

MV 28 Getting Close

I wrote a good bit more on chapter 28 tonight. I also took the length into account, and made some changes to my plans for where I'm going to break up events into chapters. As a result, I am now close to completing the rough draft of chapter 28. However, the fact that I struggled with some parts of it means that as soon as I do complete the draft, there are places where I'm going to have to go back and do some cleaning up. Still, I'm definitely making progress, and I'm getting closer to the day when everyone will be able to read the chapter.

Keeps on Going and Going and

I wasn't feeling very well today, but I did get some more written. It's turning into a long chapter, but there are certain things I feel I need to get through to advance the story the next notch. I'll try to write some more tomorrow.

Slow Going

My apologies to Halle for finding my story, only to discover it's unfinished, but I assure you I haven't given up on writing it. It is true I haven't written much in the last couple of weeks. It seems like every night when I get home, I sit down on the couch with my laptop, then fall asleep. They're keeping me busy.

But I'll see if I can't find some time to get some writing done later today.