Review from Anon on AFF

Quoting a review for Greenery Day on AdultFanFiction:

Size does not matter to a degree considering location of nerves. Too large is usually too painful though, because hitting the cervix is not pleasant from what I have read in medical journals. A number of guys have difficulty controlling themselves especially in climax so the ones who are too large can hurt a girl and leave a bad impression. If it was the girl’s first time it is far from impossible that she will develop trauma.

... the hell? Sir, are you aware that you were reading porn? You know, where it's not uncommon for authors to have men with baseball bat sized dicks screwing virgins and have them screaming in delight? Or was the problem that I only made him bigger than average instead of being hung like The Incredible Hulk, and therefore you expected something realistic to the point it could be printed in a medical journal?

I'm shaking my head over somebody worrying about details like this while reading such a story, instead of fapping like a normal person.

Not doing well

Sorry not to have updated in so long. The truth is, my health took a turn for the worse back in September. A minor event that put me in the hospital for a couple of days, and pretty much wiped me out. I was forced to take some time off from work, and haven't had the energy for doing much other than reading and watching TV. (Great football game today.)

Let me tell you, getting older sucks. It sure would be nice to go back to being 20 again. Or 30. Or 40 ...

At this time, it is still my intention to continue writing. I really don't want to leave MV where it currently is. I actually do have an ending in mind, and would like to get there. However, if I can get back to writing, I may need to fast forward over some parts in order to try to make sure that I get to that end. Well, time will tell.

One of my reviewers suggested that the problem was with the point I had reached in the story, and that maybe I should try starting a new story. It was a reasonable thing to think, and in fact, I've had a few thoughts that way myself. Unfortunately, a couple of half-hearted attempts to start something new haven't proved very successful either. It might still be good advice, but it seems like everything is going to remain stuck where it is until I can find the energy to start writing at all.

A storm named Irene

Hurricane Irene is passing over. Battened down, though risk in this location is not too high. I also finally seem to be on the recovery from my illness. Fingers crossed.

To Zenta. (1) Concerning your request for a futanari Akane fucking girl-Ranma — sorry, but no. Dick-girls are not a fetish of mine, in any way, shape or form. I am willing to consider giving Akane, or one of the other girls, either a temporary or permanent Jusenkyo curse which turns her fully male, and then letting her screw Ranma or the other girls. I doubt that I'll be doing that with Akane in Moxibustion Violation, but I might do something of the sort with Ukyo.

To Zenta. (2) Regarding your question whether the Amazons will have a role in Moxibustion Violation. The answer is “no” they're in China and I'm planning to leave them there. I'm quite willing to consider using them in other, future stories, but I don't intend for them to make an appearance in MV. Oh, and as to whether Ranma and Akane will be cured in the end and get their revenge, I guess you'll just have to keep on reading to find out (and hope that I eventually bring the story to the conclusion I intend).

I'm afraid that I've been spending time the last couple days which I should have spent writing instead playing the flash game Atomized which was posted to Hentai Foundry. And it isn't even a hentai game! But I do have the #2 score of 4962 (for which I gave my initials H.S.). I find it strangely addictive.

tuatara's Review

This post is in response to the review by tuatara of my story Moxibustion Violation, which appeared on AFFnet on 2011-07-22. In fact, he apparently created an account on AFFnet just to leave the review.

First, let me say that I'm happy to get reviews of all kinds, positive or negative. Hell, what's shocking to me, given the type of story I've written, is that I haven't received a ton of negative reviews. And tuatara's review wasn't even really negative, at least in regard to the story, only toward the other reviewers. I do wish that AFFnet would give me a means to respond to reviews, aside from putting responses in an author's note in the next chapter, when I finally get around to posting the next chapter. Hell, anybody else on the planet could respond to one of these reviews by writing a review of his own. But if I do that the administrators will hide the story and threaten to delete it (since this is precisely what they did when I made some responses of that sort).

Second, I don't want to say anything particularly negative to this reviewer. His review was civil, and he's entitled to his opinion. And I want to hear that opinion. The reviews give me a chance to hear how my readers as a whole feel, and this is how one of them feels.

At the same time, it definitely feels to me as if he's off target. He says, "if I'm to take many of these reviews at face value." Who would take anything related to non-vanilla porn at face value? It's all about fantasy. I sincerely hope there is no one reading my story who cannot separate fantasy from reality. Anyone who would wish for non-consensual scenes from MV to take place in reality would be a sick, sick person.

When people write reviews to express the pleasure they've experienced in reading the story, they are expressing their pleasure in the fantasy. When they tell me what they enjoyed in the story, or would like to see happen, and so forth, it is a given that they are telling me what they liked or hope for from the fantasy. I don't see how anyone could mistake this as a statement of what they like or would enjoy in reality, or even anything remotely close to that. I have certainly never received any such impression (of the latter sort) from any of my reviews, and I hope I never do.

In the end, as with any porn, you should read the things which appeal to your fantasies and avoid the things which don't, and never confuse your fantasies with reality. It seems to me that should go for reviews of such stories as well, at least regarding the reviewers' emotional responses to the story. So I suppose that tuatara is making the right decision to avoid reading any further reviews, if he finds he has difficulty reading them in that manner.

Pariah's Review

Regarding Pariah's review of Examination:

Hehe. Well played.

I guess you needed a break from the drama and moodiness. Good outcome.

I suppose the only criticism I have is that the sexual description was lacking. But, as you say, I suppose too much emphasis on that would ruin the clinical decorum.

I was half expecting them to do an anal exam after her preliminary stretching. But I suppose expanding beyond the humiliation aspect of having a sexual toy up her ass would be pushing it.

I don't know whether I needed a break or not. But inspiration hit, and I had to surrender to it. Sorry about the lack of sexual description, but it seemed right at the time. For that matter, I still think it's right.

I did consider doing some more anally, but decided against it. Porn or not, I felt it would stretch the scenario too far for the film crew to get away with clearly anal procedures. After all, it was supposed to be an examination by a gynecologist, not a gastroenterologist.

Story Hidden on AFFnet

My story Moxibustion Violation has been hidden on AFFnet, apparently because I added reviews in response to readers' reviews asking when I would update, to let them know I was still working on the story. The thing that bugs me, though, is that in telling me they were doing so they claimed that they sent me a previous notice on Jan 11 and they only took this action since I did nothing in response. The problem is that I didn't receive any previous notice. I've checked my email archive, and my message box on AFFnet itself. So as I said, I'm a bit miffed.

In any case, I've deleted those review entries, and replied to their notification. So hopefully the story will reappear on that site soon.

As far as additional chapters - er, sorry. Been busy. First with the holidays. More recently, a lot of my weekend free time has been taken up watching the football playoffs. I'll try to get back to it soon. Honest.

Painful Reading

This is more or less a response to MSA's review of 2010-12-17 on AFFnet.

I understand that feeling of rage, upset, or just sick awfulness that can overcome one when reading a story where something bad happens to a character, or some character behaves in a particularly appalling fashion. I too have had the experience of reading a story only to be upset, in an extreme fashion, by events within it - upset to the point of wanting to step into the story to do something about it. Upset to a degree where I can't get my thoughts away from it, for hours, even an entire day.

But I don't believe that I've ever had that feel when reading pornography. It's like I have two different mentalities for reading stories. In the "ordinary" mode, reading about abuse of a character, particularly a character I like, can be very distressing. But in "pornography" mode such events are more expected, and also feel less real, more like they're "just" fantasy.

My story Moxibustion Violation is definitely intended as pornography. If I were a reader (instead of the author), and I approached MV as ordinary fan-fiction instead of pornography, I seriously doubt I would ever have gotten past the first chapter. I would have been in a frothing rage at the author for daring to write such a brutal rape of a character I like. But approached as pornography it's completely different, it's not merely less upsetting - I can actually find it arousing. I believe that something similar is true for me as the author (instead of reader), except that I believe I'm even more insulated by the act of creation.

So I'm glad to hear that people feel emotionally invested in the story. But I hope that everyone keeps in mind that MV is intended as erotica, and that of a pretty dark kind. Reading it on any other basis, well, it just seems to me that doing so would be far too painful.

Kazuma Review of 27

I just read Kazuma's review of chapter 27:

I've been keeping up with the story since it started, but i really got to say that the idea of adding Ukyo to the equation is a terrible idea. would of prefer that you killed her off, but then i just hated Ukyo in a general since since she was first introduced in the manga. I look forward to what you plan on doing but I have ideas and not too fond of 'em.

Everyone has their own tastes in characters of course. For each reader, only time will tell whether what I do with the character will be interesting or not. For what it's worth, I don't expect Ukyo to become as much a main character as, say, either Ryoga or Gosunkugi. Still, she will be around.

The real reason I'm making this post in reply to the review is because of a fascinating coincidence. Immediately prior to reading this review, I was watching an episode of the anime Kaze no Stigma on Hulu. The male protagonist of that show is named ... wait for it ... Kazuma.

Scorpinac Review of MV 25

This is a comment on Scorpinac's review of chapter 25 of Moxibustion Violation.

Scorpinac wrote:
Somehow, I think that little boat excursion would have been more comfortable in the spring or summer time, but I digress. And Hikaru continues to gain respect, I must say. Though I must also admit to perfectly understanding his reasons. As to the close, yeah, should have seen that one coming, though sadly Ryoga covered it well. And somehow I think he's going to step things up a bit now that Soun and Genma are out of the equation for a while...though there is still Nabiki and Kasumi... Ah, well. Until chapter 26, then. Laters.

Just looked at your correction of chapter 24, and yes, that works, makes much more sense now. And since I forgot before, Ukyo really needs a shrink, doesn't she? At least she trying to control her anger, but for how long? Oh, well. Again, laters.

I definitely agree it would have been more comfortable in warmer weather. On the other hand, there would almost certainly have been other people out on the lake in that case, so likely they wouldn't have been able to get away with what they did.

Yes, Hikaru is thinking long term here.

The stuff with Ukyo in this chapter wasn't planned, the character sprung it on me. Getting rid of the fathers like that has been planned for some time. I was setting it up in the previous chapters both by revealing that Ryoga had sufficient funds for such a purpose, and with Ryoga's story about the method of curing Ranma and Akane - which now provides the excuse to send them away.

And no, there is not still Nabiki and Kasumi. Nabiki is in the U.S. now. So there is only still Kasumi. I am not planning to send Kasumi away (nor will she be gang banged by Michio and company).

Yes, Ukyo is trying to control her anger a bit. As you sense, she is unlikely to be ultimately successful.

MV 25 Stats

The new chapter has been up for about eight hours so far on AdultFanFiction, and about six hours on AssTR. Cumulative hits for the day are around 170 for AdultFanFiction, and 1700 for AssTR. There's one review.

I'm just sharing data by the way, not complaining about anything. It would be nice to have more reviews, but I'm assuming I'll get the usual number in the next few days. Almost all of which will come from readers on AdultFanFiction.

To "Anon" who's given the sole review so far - no, Ukyo won't get away Scot free. Neither is she going to become another slave to the gang. Wait and see how I balance it.

Ultimate Weakness Moxibustion - Preliminary

A commenter brought to my attention that while it is probable that most readers of my story Moxibustion Violation have previously read the manga series Ranma 1/2, this is not necessarily true of all readers. Those who haven't would therefore be unfamiliar with the ultimate weakness moxibustion story arc from the series, which would hamper their understanding of the set up of my story. Therefore, I propose to provide a summary here of that particular storyline from the manga.

This particular arc consists of twelve chapters (which I will list here as simply chapters 1–12). In the English translation published by VIZ, these start with chapter 6 in volume 11 and conclude with chapter 6 in volume 12. In the Japanese, or in translations based off of its numbering such as the Ranma project scanlations, the first chapter is chapter 1 of volume 13, and the conclusion is in chapter 1 of volume 14.

Piercing

It has been privately suggested that I consider having the molesters force Ranma and Akane to be pierced, as this provides possibilities for BDSM play. I thought I'd let everyone know now that this isn't going to happen, for the simple reason that I personally regard piercing as a turn off.

Please note, this is a personal taste. I have no problem with other people liking it, or liking to read about it, or having it done themselves. But as the author of the story, given that writing about it would have a negative effect on my libido, it's not going to be showing up.

Sorry 'bout that (for those of you who would have enjoyed it).

Ryoga Keeping Ranma Male

T H Tiger, review of chapter 24, extract:
I do have a quibble, it's wholly because of my bias and likely not shared by everyone. It was Ryouga keeping Ranma male, and actually getting him to steer Ryouga into Akane. A mervelous bit of nasty on Ryouga's part, but I can't help but think he would be uncomfortable as hell with a guy handling his junk. In my own mind he just covered well and really ground Ranma's nose in the dirt at the same time. For my preference I'd just as well prefer it if Ranma were not male during these little sessions.

I think it is quite reasonable to assume that Ryoga was uncomfortable with having Ranma's hand on his manhood, if for no other reason his memories of what Ranma was like before he became weak. I mean, would you really be comfortable having a guy take hold of your prick when he hates your guts, and you can remember a time when he could lift and toss boulders around? So as THTiger suggested, I think Ryoga did feel that way, but suppressed any expression of his discomfort for the sake of carrying out this piece of nastiness.

I won't promise not to have Ranma male again during future sessions, but I believe that if I do it will be a fairly rare occurrence.

Water Temperature Goof

Oh ... blast. Bloody, bloody ... blast. As Scorpinac just pointed out to me, there's a major flaw in chapter 24. That pan of water in the greenhouse wouldn't be ice water, so it should not have changed Ranma into a girl. Damn. Now I have to go back and change the chapter, and find some way for some ice water to hit Ranma at that point.

Keeping plot points in mind is more of a pain than I realized before I began writing. Heck, just keeping track of whether Ranma is male or female is sometimes difficult.